ARLIS is in favor of simplifying the process of finding the correct instructions, which is much more difficult in Official RDA. Given that Official RDA is formatted as a collection of separate elements in no particular order, as opposed to Original RDA, where instructions appeared in a linear, numbered sequence, it's much better to have an instruction appearing within each element it applies to.
Some editing of the recommendations in the proposal (on p. 6 and p. 8) would help make them clearer (the problem is with how the proposal describes the changes to be made, not with the actual text being proposed, which is fine).
Current version (bold face added)
"Recommendation 1. Add the option "Use any source of information" following Recording an unstructured description to all manifestation transcription element that lack the option. [p. 6]
Recommendation 2. Add as the first option to choose a source of information following the guidelines under Data provenance following Recording an unstructured description in all manifestation transcription elements" [p. 8]
"Following" is used to mean both "after" and "conforming to"; this is confusing. I would suggest replacing "following" with "after" when "following" refers to placement of text, and using quotation marks around the strings of text that the options will be added to. E.g.
PROPOSED REVISIONS: (changes in bold face)
Recommendation 1. Add the option "Use any source of information "after "Recording an unstructured description" to all manifestation transcription elements [typo fixed] that lack the option.
Recommendation 2. Add as the first option to choose a source of information following the guidelines under Data provenance after "Recording an unstructured description" in all manifestation transcription elements.
Even with these revisions, Recommendation 2 is still hard to follow, perhaps because too much is being packed into a single sentence. Possible rewrite:
Recommendation 2. Add a new option, to choose a source of information following the guidelines found in Data provenance, after "Recording an unstructured description". Add this option to all manifestation transcription elements.
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Katelyn Borbely
Technical Services Librarian
College for Creative Studies
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Original Message:
Sent: Mar 10, 2025 04:35 PM
From: Kathryn Glennan
Subject: Comments requested: RSC/NARDAC/2025/2 - Inconsistency in the transcribed manifestation elements related to source of information
Colleagues-
NARDAC has asked for CC:DA's comments on a draft revision proposal, RSC/NARDAC/2025/2, Inconsistency in the transcribed manifestation elements related to source of information. (See attachment.)
To meet NARDAC's response deadline, please reply to this post with any comments you have about this proposal. All members of this community (whether CC:DA members or not) are welcome to comment. I am especially interested in your reactions to the two recommendations.
DEADLINE: Close of business, April 9, 2025.
As always, I apologize for the short amount of time we have to gather the CC:DA comments.
Kathy
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Kathy Glennan
CC:DA Chair
Director, Cataloging & Metadata Services
University of Maryland Libraries
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